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Tom is a student at the KHON KEAN middle school.Every day Tom gets up at 6:00 and after has his breakfast he goes to school at 6:15 from his home.He don't eat anything outside because his parents don't primmest him to eat the other thing.He can't listen to music on school days because his class is very more so he doesn't have time to hear music,but he doesn't feel sad.Then he can't watch TV on school nights,he must to finish his homework in sevenry hours.At time for lunch,Tom goes back home at 12:00 in the morning.He study class over at 9:20 and goes back home to have a sleep.This is Tom's one day study,do you feel he study hard?