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Hello, my name is Lucy King.of course Lucy is my first name,and King is my last name.I'm 13 years old.I'm form the UK,so I can say English.My hobbies is sports, music and movies.Now I want to find a pen pal for China.I want to find a English girl.If the pen pal have the same hobbies,it's good.If you want to make a friend for her,you can find me,and know her.