文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,但单词拼写做的很棒;但从句使用不熟练,注意平时练习中多积累;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段;可以适当增加副词的使用。
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday morning.Then he went to the park by bike.He played of very happy in the park.At noon,he had lunch in the McDonald's with his parents.At afternoon,he played basketball from four o'clock to six o'clock with his classmates.After dinner,he went for a walk with his father.His father bought a classical music's CD for him.What a fun day Sam had!