文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;从句使用不熟练;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
Sam got up at six a'clock yesterday. Then he went to the park by bike. He enjoyed himself in the park. In the noon, he ate lunch with his parents in McDonald's. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball with his classmates at school, when it was from four o'clock to six o'clock. After the dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father. His father bought him a piece of classical CD. What a funny day Sam had passed.