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i'm a middle school student i have thirty classmates in my class our monitor is a girl her name is shirley she have two big bright eyes,short hair not taller,we are like you because she always help other students,my teacher have backache she always clean the board ,carries the chair to teacher,take books and teaching tool reach to classroom.she always finished who teacher ask the questions almost correct,sometime the other classmate have a question,she always patient explains,more often discuss she always win.she is a smart girl and like help us ,she is very happy every day we 're like her and love her