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Tom get up at six o'clock everyday. Then he go to school at six to a quite. He has his breakfast at home. He never eats outside. He is a good boy, so he never listen to music on school days. He also doesn't watch TV on school nights. After school, he will be back home by 12 o'clock in the morning and by 9 o'clock past 20 in the evening.