作者词汇积累很好,不过单词拼写方面要继续努力;适当增加一些从句的使用;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
speckig of summer camp i like most is last summer i went the hangyan camp with my frind .from the activity i learn many skills .we driver a car to get there.after we arrived thee we took some photos .we been trained to master some life skills on this activity.it is useful foe us to learn cooking skills .mast this skill ,we can stay at home and make dishes for my parents.to exoress my love to them. i felt very happy to atted this summer camp.it become make me popular among my frirends . it also porovid more chance to commmunication with others . it benefit all of us