单词拼写做的不错,文中词汇表达贫乏;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段;可以适当增加副词的使用。
Our monitor Our monitor is a girl.She has black hair,a nice face,two big eyes and a little mouth.She is kind to us.And she is a good student.Many teachers all like her.She studies hard.She aways helps us with our study.We all like her.She is our good fiend.And she is teachers' good helper.