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I think life is a planned way.So I had a Life Rules. I get up at 6:00.We should get up early.I go to school at 6:15.Don’t eat outside.Becanse the outside is not good for our health.And don't listen to music on school days.We should concentrate on learning.Study is an importance matter.But if I finish my work that I can have a rest.And don’t watch TV on school nights.Because I need a better effort to go into the second day of leaning.And I must be back home by 12:00 in the morning and by 9:20 in the evening.Because it's dangerous to stay outside.I think I can finish their tasks as required。