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Life ideal , is therefore likely to get lost in life. That the ideal is life navigation lighthouse , little its , our life may be that a slice is perplexed. Five grades , teacher in class praise a composition that I write. After being praised that time, I am only too glad to grinned from ear to ear. At the same time, think that this lofty ideal has sprouted just at my heart serving as a writer. That time, my very simple believing: Write praising easy to write a composition and to be able to accept a teacher , be therefore likely to have served as a writer! But, learning discovering self just now gradually is childish. Though I do not deny that the ideal setting up is wrong, but I know that at least still more now that time so hasty arrive at: Excellent one writer, in fact does not need very much praising for , can have made person read his article queen but, those the people who commits mistake can wake up with a start , those void people is able to feel rich , those dull people can find delight. Suppose I can become a writer in the future,I will be able to white out life's let people discover the delight living bit by bit. I am not easy to know very well that , need to become one writer. I am fond of writing culture, but can not control characters all the time, always, the essential points usualness field tears up the article having changed several time, but I am never dejected , firmly believe that because of me: I am able to write next time better! In the future, I want to use in self hand to white out self wonderful lifetime too. Therefore, I am more incapable abandon the ideal serving as a writer. Keleiluofuzeng said one words: "Reality is this shore , the ideal is Faramita, centre is separated by torrential river , acting for realizing an ideal to be to put up the bridge on the river then, mentioning alone is not good , serious being composes ". Therefore, I must learn to observe life , study well , finish striking a basis. , I had made great efforts at least although I know that this pawns writer's ideal is able to come true not necessarily ,I have no the resentment nothing regretting, think that writer's ideal may be that I guide direction.
