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I want to be a doctor in the future.As wee all known that Sichuan has happened a powerful earthquake.And so many people injured or died.They need our help.So my dream was born.I will study very hard and learn more and more knowledge about medcial science.Doing some operations of small animals .I believe that my dearm will come true.