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what is my favorite sport ? of cause it is playing football . i fell in love playing football is by chance, one day i picked up a football when i go home , then have play the football with my friends,it was very funy. from then on i have had a crush on playing football. we have frequently train and take match. my favorite football star is Beckham, my greatest wish is to be a professional football player