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Tom’s one day Today is a nice day, at five thirty, he gets up. Then he runs at six o’clock, so he is very strong. He eats breakfast at seven o’clock. He goes to school at seven forty five. In the afternoon, he goes home at a quarter past four. At home he does his homework at five thirty. Eats dinner at a quarter past seven. He go to bed at nine o’clock. What’s a beautiful day.