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sAm gets up at six o'clock yesterday. And then go to the park by bike, he played happily in the park. At noon and parents in McDonald's (McDonald 's) for lunch. Afternoon Sam and his classmates play basketball at school, from four p.m. until six p.m. (till). After dinner, walk together Sam and father (go for a walk), his father bought him a piece of classical music CD. Sam had this day how very interesting.
