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Sam got up at six o'clock.After that sam rode his bike to the park, he is very happy in the park.At noon he had lunch in MCDonald's with his parents.In the afternoon he played basketball from four to six o'clock with his classmates.After dinner ,sam went for a walk with his father.His father gave he a music CD .What a happy day sam have.