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A story,name of Million Pound by writed Mark Twain.The story said that a fortuitous adventure about a Americe poor boy,name of Henry Adams.Once times,two rich man had a debate that hand out a million pound ticket for Henry.And then,they will observe Henry who face it in a month.Howere,Henry didn't dead of hungry and gave a love fora prety girl in affer month.
