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Sam get up at six o’clock yesterday morning. After that, he riding his bike to the park. He had great fun play in the park. At the noon, he has lunch at McDonald’s to his parents. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball with his classmates from four to six . It was relaxing. After dinner, Sam goes for a walk with his father. His father bought a classical CD for him. He is very happy because he enjoys music very good. How a happy day Sam had!
