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Long time ago,human is interest space because it so fantasy.So,there will be a speech hold in our school Lecture Hall.This speak host by Mr.Li from Beiling University that name of China Spaceflight.And the time on Thursday 2:30 p.m,Jaunnry 5th.That's a great new.And then,something is space fans love that the speech content about China Spaceflight improve,backgound,process,a brief history,some sitution of astornaut.How wonderful! I love this speech.And you are?