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Sam geted up at six oclock yesterday.Then he by bike to park, he good enjoy yourself in park. he with his family eat lunch in McDonald's. afternoon,Sam with his classmates play basketball in school.from 4 until 6 oclock.after dinner ,he and his father go for a walk ,his father to buy a CD for he ,this interesting for Sam.