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Sam get up at six yesterday. and then,he ride a bicycle to park and had a good time.at noontime,he eat with his parents at McDonarld's.at afternoon,Sam play basketball with his shoolfriends till 6pm. after dinner,Sam had gone for a work with his father who had bought a classic CD for him.what a happy day for Sam.