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My new teacher is lin teacher. He’s very good-looking. He has a small mouth, two big ears, two big eyes and a not too big and not too small nose. He often wears a dress My lin teacher is very kind. And he is very smart, isn’t he? Today, we have lin class. We are very happy. Because he is so funny. Who is he? He’s a Mr. lin.