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Yesterday,Sam got up at 6:00 in the morning.After that, he rode his bike to the park. He had a good time in the park. At noon, he had lunch in Mcdonald's with his parents.In the afternoon, he was in the school where he played basketball from four clock till six clock. After supper, he went for a walk with his father,his father brought him a classical CD . It was a wonderful day for Sam.