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Sam awoke up at six clock yesterday.And then,he went to park by bike.playing is so happy.For luch with his parents in MacDonald.at four o'clock sam played basketball with classmates at school till six o'clock.He went for a walk with his farther after supper,and his father bought a classical cd for him.What a interesting day!