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A Funny Day Sam got up at six and went to park by bike yesterday.He played very happy in the park. He have lunch at McDonald's with his parents .And then he played football with his classmates from 4 to 6 .After supper,he go for a walk with his father,his father bought him a classical music CD.It's really a funny day.