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Sam got up 6 o'clock yesterday morning.Then he go to the park by bike and he is very happy in this park.At noon,he go to the Mc Donald's with his father and mother eat the lunch.At afternoon,he plays the basketball with his classmates in school from 4 o'clockutill 6 o'clock.After dinner go far a walk with his father that his farther bought a music'CD.How is the day is a nice day.