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Yesterday,Sam got out of bed when time is six o'clock.He rided bicycle to park,and he had a good time in park.He eat lunch in the McDonald's with his parents noon.Afternoon,he played basketball with his classmates in the school,they play four till six o'clock.When he eated dinner,he go for a walk with his father,his father buy a classcial music CD for him.this day Sam have so happy.