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Yesterday,Sam got out of bed when time is six o'clock.He went to the park by bike,and he had a good time in the park.When noon he eat lunch in the McDonald's with his parents.Sam in the afternoon to play basketball with his classmates in the school,From four pm until six pm.When he eated dinner,he go for a walk with his father,his father buy a classcial music CD for him.This day Sam have so happy.