句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;文中单词拼写做的不错,另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
Yesterday,Sam got out of bed when time is six o'clock.He went to the park by bike,and he had a good time in the park.When noon he eat lunch in the McDonald's with his parents.Sam in the afternoon to play basketball with his classmates in the school,From four pm until six pm.When he ate dinner,he go for a walk with his father,and his father buy a classcial music CD for him.This day Sam have so happy.