单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;错误句子较少,可适当增加一些复杂句的使用;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段;可以适当增加副词的使用。
Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday.He went to bank by bike.He was enjoy playing at park.He ate lunch with his parents at McDonald's.In the afternoon,Sam played basketball with his classmates in school,they played till 6 o'oclock in the afternoon.after dinner,san went for a walk with his father.His father bought a cd fou him,that was a funny day.