单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段;可以适当增加副词的使用。
Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday.Then he went to the bank by bike.He was enjoy playing at the park.He ate lunch with his parents at McDonald's.In the afternoon,Sam played basketball with his classmates in school,they played till 6 o'oclock in the afternoon.After dinner,Sam went for a walk with his father.At last,His father bought a cd for him,that was a funny day.