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Tom usually gets up at 6 o'clock.After breasket,he leaves for school at a quarter past 6.As a student,he was told that there are some taboos.For example,he never doesn't eat outside.He can not listen to music and doesn't watch TV when he on school days.His parents also asked him that he be back home by 12 o'clock in the morning and by twenty past 9 in the evening.