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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday. After that, he rode his bike to park, and he was funning in the park. At noon, he had lunch at McDonald's with his parents. At afternoon, Sam played basketball with his classmates from four to six o'clock. After dinner, he went for a walk with his fater, and his father bought a classic CD for him. How interesting in this day
