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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday. After that, he rode his bike to the park, and he had great fun playing in the park. At noon, he had lunch at McDonald's with his parents. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball with his classmates from four to six o'clock. It was relaxing. After dinner, he went for a walk with his father, and his father bought a classical CD for him. He was very happy because he enjoys music very much. What a happy day Sam had.