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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday morning. After that, he rode his bike to the park. He had great fun playing in the park. At noon, Sam had lunch at McDonald's with his parents. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball from four to six with his classmates. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his fater. His father bought a classical CD for him. He was very happy because he enjoys music very much. What a happy day Sam had.
