拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
My favorite sport is definitely football. I fell in love with it by chance. One day, I picked up a football in my way home after school. I was so curious about it that i played it with my friends. From then on, I enjoyed playing football very well. In order to improve my skills, I usually have been training hard for various football matches with my classmates. Hard training depressed many people, but in the case of me, it was otherwise. I admire Beckham very much and he is my favorite star. My greatest dream is to be a professional football player, just like Beckham.