希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是学术词汇的积累;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
I had a happy holiday last week. On Saturday morning,I watched TV and helped my mother wash clothes.In the afternoon,I cleaned three bedrooms in my house-- mine,my parents’ and my brother’s. On Sunday,I played football in the park.Then I went to my grandparents’ house.Grandpa played the piano!The whole family was so happy.Later,we wanted to swim.But it was too cold. This was a really nice holiday .