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Meet Uncle Sam. He has a lot of bills to pay, almost four trillion dollars' worth every year. Uncle Sam's income is a little over two trillion dollars per year. To make up the difference, the deficit, he does what most Americans do: he borrows money. Kenyan capital. He earns about $50 per month, making and selling coconut confections. Four years ago, Nyongesa became radicalized after listening to sermons from some of the mosques in Pumwani. But he stopped short of joining al-Shabab, he said, after hearing what he calls "correct" teachings from the Riyadh Majengo Mosque. “I changed from being radicalized after listening to sermons and teachings of the sheikhs at the mosque, and I came to discover that in Islam one is not allowed to shed innocent blood,” said Nyongesa.