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Dear All, I'm pleased to inform all the sales team that HR is going to organize a training about the sales skills and operation. The content is related to the basic qualities of the sales person,I.e how to be a qulified sales person,how to establish the regular relationship with the customers,how to negotiate with customer for the discount The trainer is Amy who graduated from Cambridge University,He has a lot of experience in training and sales work.Also he was invited to Alibaba to speech by Ma Yun,so we do believe this training will be very helpful for us to improve the real skills At last,please make sure to attend it on time,thank you