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Dear All, I'm pleased to inform all the sales team that HR is going to organize a training about the sales skills and operation. Date: 12Aug,2013 Time: 9:00am to 11:00am Room: No. meeting room The content is related to the basic qualities of the sales people,I.e how to be a qualified sales person,how to establish the contacting with the customers,how to negotiate the discount with the customers The trainer is Amy who graduated from Cambridge University,He has a lot of experience in training and sales work.Also he was invited to Alibaba to speech by Ma Yun,so we do believe this training will be extremly helpful for us to improve the real skills At last,please make sure to attend it on time,thank you