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Dear All, I'm pleased to inform all the sales team that HR is going to organize a training about the sales skills and operation. The content is related to the basic qualities of the sales people,I.e how to be a qualified sales person,how to establish the long term relationship with the customers,how to negotiate the discount with the customers The trainer is Amy who graduated from Cambridge University,He has a lot of experience in training and sales working.Also he was invited to Alibaba to speech by Ma Yun,so we do believe that this training will be very helpful for us to improve the real skills At last,please make sure to attend it on time,thank you