拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;错误句子很少,但从句使用不熟练;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
Dear All, I am pleased to inform all the sales team that HR is going to organize a training about sales skills and operation. The material is related to the basic qualities of sales people, how to establish the contacting with customers, how to negotiate with customers for getting further orders. The trainer is XXX, who graduated from Cambridge University, and now worked for xxx. He has a lot of experience in training and sales working experience, also he was invited to Alibaba to lecture by Ma yun. So we do believe he can help us to improve the real sales skills. At last, welcome all the sales staffs to attend this training in time. Best regards, HR Dept