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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday. Then he rode his bike to the park. He had a good time in the park. Soon he had lunch with his parents at McDonald's. In the afternoon Sam and his classmates played basketball from four o'clock till six at the school. After dinner Sam got for a walk with his father.Then his father bought a classcial CD for him, he was very gald. What an interesting day Sam had!