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Tom is a student in middle school.He often gets up at 6:00 on school days.And he usually has breakfast at home and never eat outside. He goes to school at 6:15 so he is never late for school. His parents ask him not to listen to music on school days. After school he often does his homework at home and does't watch TV except on holiday. He always goes back home before 12:00 in the morning and 9:20 in the evening. He is a good student.