正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;词汇表达较灵活准确,学术词汇使用过少,另外注意文中个别的拼写错误;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;可以适当增加副词的使用。
Pen pal wanted Hello,My name is Lucy King.Lucy is my first name and King is the last name. I'm 13 yeas old and I come from the UK that people speak English as the first language. I have three hobbies. The first one is to play sports. I always play kinds of sports with my friends after class. The second one is to listen to music. Beacuse music can make me realx and enjoyment. However the last one is movie. I often go to the cinema and watch movies on weekend. I need a pen friend from China. Because I love China so much and I want to know more about it. I hope I will make a pen friend who I have the same hobbies with and can learn chinese from.Are you? Hope to recieve your letter.