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With the development and popularity of the internet,more and more people like online shopping.Everybody in the world knows that the most easy way to buy things is to buy on the net,you can seat at home to buy everything what you want by computer,it's very convenient and it can save us a lot of your time,even more it's cheap. Even though it's very beneficial to our daily life,there are still something bad about the online shopping,for example,we can't see the real things when we are buying it.So sometimes we bought the things they are not exactly what we want.Even it created a lot of chances for illegal businesses to sell fakes because we buy them only through pictures,so we don't have any chance to inspect the quality of the goods So i do suggest that we should go to the securit and reliable website to buy things,meanwhile the relevant government departments should pay more attention to the quality and credit of the online store