文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;句式变化不明显,另外要多多加强从句在文中的比例;文章层次不够分明,缺少组织,需注意文章整体的组织结构。
Sam got up at six o′clock yesterday.Them by bike went to the park,he is play in the park feels happy.Noon and parents in the McDonald’s have a lunch. Afternoon sam and his classmate play basketball at school,From four pm until till at six pm.After dinner,Sam and father go for walk after dinner,father gave his a Classical music CD.How interesting the day Sam was!