丰富的使用了长难句;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构欠佳;文章词汇表达多样性不足,不过词汇拼写要再接再厉。
Every day can diffirent that you can have a good moody ,Do you think so ?now ,let's me tell you sam how passes himself time. Yesterday is a wonderfui to sam,sam got up early and go to park by bike ,he have fun at there, in the noon ,he and he's parents have lunch in the mcdonald's,then ,he play basketball with his classmares in the school untill six clock's.at evening,he have to go to back home ,he had recived classical music cd from his fatherwhen he had gots into the door . that's sam day ,what about you ? do you have plan you how spent you time tomorrow?