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With the rapid development of economic and technology,more and more people own their private cars.As the saying goes:"No garden is without weeds." Different people hold opposite opinions toward owning cars. The people who against owning private cars think the more cars we drive ,the more serious the air pollution will be.What's more,this situation will cause more accidents and do harm to the transportation.Worse still,we haven't enough place to park cars is the biggest problem. There are also a part of people are in favour of owning cars.Because we can go anywhere at anytime with private cars.In addition, cars can develop the level of live and make our country more power and richer. Everything has its two sides,what's your opinion about it ?