词汇表达不够丰富,要增加高级词汇的使用;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;文中衔接词丰富。
My grandfather My grandfather is very tall in my impression and who often plays an important character in my heart.It may be briefly summed up as follows. To start with,he always helped me when I met difficult in life.For another,he is a target in my heart that I have to make progress continually to go beyond myself. As far as I'm concerned,I love my grandfather.