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With the rapid development of economic and technology,more and more people own their private cars.As the saying goes:"No garden is without weeds." Different people hold different opinions toward owning cars. The people who against owning cars think the more cars we drive,the more serious the air pollution will be.What's more,this situation will cause more accidents and do harm to the transportation.Worse still,we haven't enough place to park cars is the biggest problem. There are also part of people that are in favour of owning cars. Obvious,with private cars we can go anywhere immediately.In addition, cars can develop standards of living and make our country more power and richer. Everything has its two sides,what's your opinion about it?